The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Aisian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

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The given graph demonstrates the percentages of the population in four different Asian countries,Philippines,Malaysia,Thailand,

Indonesia

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and Indonesia

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seven

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year

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seven-year

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time period starting from 1970. Taken as a whole,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Aisian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

You are renting an apartment. Write a letter to your landlord regarding a noise problem from your neighbors. Include the following in your letter: – What is the problem? – What have you done about it? – What would you like the landlord to do?

Some people believe that uniform should be compulsory for workplaces, while other says that it is not important. Discuss both views and give opinion.

Some believe governments should spend more money on improving roads and highways, while some think money should be spent improving public transportation, such as buses, trains, and subways. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Some people think that the success of life is based on hard work and determination. Others, however, believe that there are more important factors, such as having money or a good appearance. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this?