Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extend do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?
It is argued that the main aim of
do
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space
travel is to attract other countries
to see their new invention of technology rather than international matters. I agree to
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with
this
notion because of the following reasons.
On the one hand, it is a natural tendency to become widely known. As a matter of fact, invention
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the invention
an invention
space
travel also
become a way of showing each of the state-of-the-art of
technology they have particularly in developed Change preposition
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countries
. Furthermore
, they even compete among
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with
countries
. Take Rusia
and The United States Correct your spelling
Russia
for
example, explore Add the comma(s)
,for
space
several times during
a year and exaggerate their reports in the media to seek people's attention and gain popularity. Change preposition
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Thus
, even if it takes a long period of time to prove and take
much money to support them, they still invest in Verb problem
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space
exploration to keep up their pride.
On the other hand
, having said that, in the future wealthy people will put their sight on this
invention. It might be driven by the
sense of curiosity since humans have a natural tendency to go beyond their Correct article usage
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limits
For instance
, a well-known millionaire, Elon Musk sent his car into space
and probably has other ideas for further
exploration which could allow more people experiencing
it as having leisure time on earth.
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to experience
To conclude
, in order to boost their pride, developed countries
mostly explore other spaces to boost their pride. Therefore
, it is undeniable that in the future it might be a common thing for them to travel to other horizons using the means of sophisticated transportation that they have.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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