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Information technology enables many People to do thier work. Outside their workplace . Do benifits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is undeniable that internet technology has
provide
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 great benefits for employees to have distance working.
Although
 it has huge benefits, I think, it
also
 has some drawbacks in terms of the quality and how they maintain their relationship among themthe employees. One of the biggest benefits of working remotely is
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time management. Mostly, people choose
working
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 from home because it allows them to complete tackle several daily
choresjobs
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chores jobs
 in a day
while
 keeping their eyes on the main
work
 responsibility
one
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.
For example
,
this
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 case women have a tendency to do
house
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housework
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work
such
 as cooking, laundry or playing with their kids if the task is just to report or attend online meetings.
This
 is why people like to
work
 from home because they still have more spare time to do other regular
choresjobs
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chores
. Despite these advantages, it is believed that there might be some detrimental effects of
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this
 kind of
methodjob
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method
.
Firstly
, there will be a lack of ability in their working qualities which is they will put less effort
such
 as needing long hours to finish their job even the simple one.
Secondly
, they do not have real communication with their colleagues and it will decrease their social relationship bonding. Obviously, working out of the regular place has other negative aspects,
thus
 it is better to keep the regular working environment alive as usual.
To conclude
, working outside of the office allows people to manage their time
according to
 their own schedule.
However
, it probably lowers their quality because they
work
while
 doing other things and
could not
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 focus on their task
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