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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Others prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

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 development of society has had individuals to have a wider range of choices in their lives. Some enjoy new
things
such
 as food or travel,
while
 others prefer to keep doing
things
 they are familiar with because it makes them feel comfortable.
This
 essay will explore both notions before a conclusion is derived. Trying new
things
 can be an exciting and enriching experience. Some believe that it can even broaden one’s horizons.
For instance
, visiting new places can be a good opportunity to learn about different customs, traditions and ways of life of the place, which can enhance their understanding
toward
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 others.
Moreover
, trying international cuisine, they can eat different kinds of vegetables and spices, and learn more about their taste.
On the other hand
, some individuals prefer to maintain what they know and are familiar with. They may have fear about the unknown or any
changes
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 of mockery in the case of their failure. For
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 reason, they may have
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 challenging novel
things
. Others may find more peace and comfort in their routine. In fact, for those who have a busy work schedule, going to the same restaurant for
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 every day and ordering the dish they usually have is not only convenient and time-efficient, but
also
 gives a peace of mind out of familiarity. In conclusion,
although
 changes in life can make us more vibrant, I prefer to do something familiar
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.
This
 is because trying new changes makes me more
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 and
this
 requires me to use more energy.
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