The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram presents the process of producing drinking
water
from gathering rainwater in a town in Australia.
Overall
,
water
is processed through three main steps from the filter to the chemical treatment to serve consumers.
Firstly
, when it rains, each house collects rainwater from its roof and goes through gutters, eventually running into drains at the bottom of the house.
Then
the installed one large pipe underneath of houses gathers
water
from four houses and sends
water
through a filter to remove physical, biological and chemical contaminations from various causes
as a result
of making purified
water
.
Secondly
, after the process of
water
filtration from households, filtered
water
is kept in a large industrial size of storage tank to move on to the next final step. The
last
procedure is
water
treatment which is so-called sanitization to produce safe drinkable
water
for the public. In fact, the
water
storage tank and the treatment tank are connected with one duct and a couple of factories are built it on, eventually,
water
is treated by releasing chemicals from an upper building and carried away to houses in a town.
Finally
, rainwater is used without any adverse events.
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