The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.
Due to
reasons like
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immigrant
immigrants
and
goverment
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government
policy,there is an obvious
change
in the number of
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speaker
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in
Canada
, which can be indicated from the pie chart above. From the pie chart above, we can find that from 1980 to 1990,the
English
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native speakers had
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by 15%.By
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contrast
,natives
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speaking
Chinese
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from 9% to 11%,and those who
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Urdu had
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from 15% to 28%,which is a dramatic
increase
. Whether the
change
in the number of native speakers of
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language a good thing
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a bad one?I think the answer is
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positive
.
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the native English
speaker's
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speakers
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decreasing
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may
change
people's language
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environment
,which could make people
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less familiar with the conservation they live
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this
change
can bring
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great benefits
as well.
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,the
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Chinese speakers showed that there was a
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tendency
for Chinese to move
into
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Canada
,which could help add to
Canada
's cultural diversity and break down the language barrier between natives in
Canada
and the world.
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,the residents who
speaked
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speak
Urdu
increase
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great
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help to maintain
Canada
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sense of
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for the local people.
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political
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aspect,
this
change
meant that local residents' power in deciding national
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affairs
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and making policy may
increase
.Because the
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barrier
from outer had
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decrease
decreased
as well. We can find a lot of information
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the pie
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chart,not only the numbers,but
also
the
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reasons
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and facts
behine
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behind
it.And
Canada
's government ought to make some
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solutions
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due to
these changes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • native speakers
  • pie chart
  • number
  • different languages
  • Canada
  • 1996
  • 2006
  • 2016
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • majority
  • minority
  • significant
  • notable
  • significant
  • share
  • dominant
  • diverse
  • linguistic landscape
  • shift
  • evolution
  • data
  • percentage
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  • graphical representation
  • pattern
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