The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billons) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002 Call type: Local - fixed line National and international - fixed line Mobiles (all calls) Minutes (billions) 100 90 80 70 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 2000 2001 2002 1999 1998 1997 1995 1996

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billons) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002

Call type:

Local - fixed line

National and international - fixed line

Mobiles (all calls)

Minutes (billions)

100

90

80

70

60

50

40

30

20

10

0

2000

2001

2002

1999

1998

1997

1995

1996
The bar chart illustrates the total number of
minutes
of telephone calls in
the
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England and is divided into three categories from 1995-2002.
to begin
with, the total
minutes
of local fixed lines outnumbered those who used worldwide fixed lines and mobiles.
This
local-fixed
line
was
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steadily increased from 1995 to 1999
then
tapering off to an almost identical level from 1999 to 2002.
Moreover
, the worldwide fixed
line
was gradually increased in 8 years.
Also
, the total number of
hand phones
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handphones
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were
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increased steadily from 1995 to 2002 except from 1999 to 2001 it
was rising
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rose
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sharply.
The
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less
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smaller
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number of mobile calls were used than other categories in the UK. The international fixed
line
was three times larger than mobile in 1995.
However
,
this
variation
was
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decreased
approximately
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15
billions
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billion
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minutes
in 2002.
Moreover
, the local fixed
line
was
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rose
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rising around 40
billions
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billion
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minutes
than
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to
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worldwide
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the worldwide
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fixed
line
in 1995
then
it was reduced
almost
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10
billions
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billion
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minutes
in 2002.
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