The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billons) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002 Call type: Local - fixed line National and international - fixed line Mobiles (all calls) Minutes (billions) 100 90 80 70 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 2000 2001 2002 1999 1998 1997 1995 1996
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The bar chart illustrates the total number of
minutes
of telephone calls in the
England and is divided into three categories from 1995-2002.
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apply
to begin
with, the total minutes
of local fixed lines outnumbered those who used worldwide fixed lines and mobiles. This
local-fixed line
was
steadily increased from 1995 to 1999 Unnecessary verb
apply
then
tapering off to an almost identical level from 1999 to 2002. Moreover
, the worldwide fixed line
was gradually increased in 8 years. Also
, the total number of hand phones
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handphones
were
increased steadily from 1995 to 2002 except from 1999 to 2001 it Unnecessary verb
apply
was rising
sharply.
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rose
The
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A
less
number of mobile calls were used than other categories in the UK. The international fixed Correct word choice
smaller
line
was three times larger than mobile in 1995. However
, this
variation was
decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
approximately
15 Change preposition
by approximately
billions
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billion
minutes
in 2002. Moreover
, the local fixed line
was
rising around 40 Verb problem
rose
billions
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billion
minutes
than
Change preposition
to
worldwide
fixed Correct article usage
the worldwide
line
in 1995 then
it was reduced almost
10 Change preposition
by almost
billions
Change to singular
billion
minutes
in 2002.Submitted by krishmahendran19 on
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