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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the Internet and live without ant face-to- face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development in your opinion?

#world #shop #work #people #internet #ant #face-to- #face #contact #development
Dear Mr. Fox, My name is Basil Turkin and I am a student
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Toronto University. Recently I lost my student identification
card
 and still have not found it. I have searched in all possible locations and have asked about it all over the university. It is really hard to live without it. That
card
 has offered me a lot of benefits from discounts in local shops to being a replacement
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 the official identification document.
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, now I have to spend much more money than usual and it creates
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a lot of problems. I would like to request a new
card
. I understand that
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 might be costly and take some time but I am ready to wait. If I remember correctly, manufacturing
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the new
card
 requires a photo and a passport. If there are any changes in the list of required items, let me know. If you require any additional information, let me know. Yours sincerely, Basil Turkin
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