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Many people see animals as tools to be used by humans to better their lives. They believe animals should help feed us and keep us healthy by being subjects to experiments that will lead to new medications and medical processes. Others believe that animals should have the same rights to a good life as humans. Discuss both views and state your own.

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Introduction
Numerous individuals
belive
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believe
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 that
animals
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 should be used by
human
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humans
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 to feed us and use them as
laboratary
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laboratory
 experiment subjects.
However
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,
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others
beleive
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believe
 that
animals
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are
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have
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 rights as humans and
they
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that they
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 should be used for
consumpation
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consumption
 or laboratory
experiemnts
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experiments
experiment
. In
this
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essay
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,essay
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 I will
prsent
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present
 both views and provide my opinion on
this
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.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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Animals
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are
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have been
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 used as
food
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 or
subject
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subjects
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 of laboratory
experiment
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experiments
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from
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for
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hundred
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hundreds
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 of years. As
human
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the human
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race
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,race
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 we have exploited them for our
benefits
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benefit
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. be it for
food
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 or for scientific experiments.
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, Since 1600 we
are
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have been
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experimentsing
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experimenting
 on different
animals
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 for
discovery
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the discovery
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 of medicine and
it
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its
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 effects on human
being
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beings
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.
i
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I
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 believe that we should have avoided that.
in
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 my opinion
animals
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 should not be used for scientific
purpose
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purposes
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 or for
food
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.
Body paragraph 2
However
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, Most
animals
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are
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have been
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 used as pets since human
civilzation
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civilisation
has
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apply
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started. we have
use
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used
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 them for our benefits and
food
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,
scientific
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and scientific
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purpose
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purposes
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. we are hugely dependent on
animals
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 for
food
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 and scientific
purpose
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purposes
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.To cite an example,
ORganisation
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organisations
 like
peta
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Peta
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 are advocating for
ethical
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the ethical
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 treatment towards
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the animal
an animal
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animal
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animals
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. we should be kind and considerate of their contribution.
Still
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,Still
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i
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I
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 am of
opinion
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the opinion
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 that
animals
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 should not be used as subjects to scientific experiments.
Conclusion
In conclusion ,
Although
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 we have realised manifold benefits from
animals
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 we should be considerate of them and should not use them as
subject
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subjects
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 of experiments or
food
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. I
belief
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believe
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 that
such
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parctices
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practices
 are unethical and we should come up with other
option
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options
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. we should have
start
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started
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 respecting their existence.

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