Some people believe that governments should ban dangerous sports even though others claim they should have the freedom to choose a sport of their liking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I was born in Ahmedabad city which is located in Gujarat. I did my 10th in 2007 in the first class from Bapunagar municipal school and after that, I chose science stream and comp 12th in 2009 with the second class during my high school education I studied many subjects

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, I enrolled in a diploma in computer engineering from 2009 to 2012 with a 6.56 CGPA from R. C. Technical Institute. I have

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my work journey in Neva Data Solutions as a Data Entry Operator during my job I learned a lot of new things and

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after 2 years and 9 months one IT company

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to work with them and I begin my career with gradually and achieve success to become senior data entry operator.

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, my boss gave me another big post which was a team leader and I performed very well and increased my skills,

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they gave me a new responsibility as senior team leader and I have performed well in my role I have learned some new qualities like how to increase revenue, how to build team, how to do business with different clients and in October 2022 I have left my job for

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opportunity and join another company as a project manager from S K Consultancy as project manager. I have experience more than 10 years in Business Management.

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Some people believe that governments should ban dangerous sports even though others claim they should have the freedom to choose a sport of their liking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Now a days, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage students . Do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages?