The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The diagram illustrates the sales of online shopping for different items in New Zealand for two years, with a decade separating both of them. From an

overall

perspective, the Travel sector took the largest portion of the number of sales in 2003, but

then

it decreased, leading to Film/Music being the largest percentage in 2013.

Furthermore

, both the Tour and the Movie/Music sectors occupied more than half of the charts in both years. Observing the details,

although

the Books item was in the

last

place in 2003, it went up from 19% to 22% in 2013, leading it to become in a better place: the third.

Similarly

, the Movie/Music portion rose from just 21% to 33%.

On the other hand

, the sales of Clothes fell by about 8 per cent (from 24% to 16%) throughout

this

10-year period, just like what happened to the Travel part. In conclusion, we can say that people tend nowadays to go on trips and buy clothes less but read more.

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The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fee. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone.What extend do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, we are surround by advertising in our daily lives. Some people believe this has a positive effect on society. Others, however, say that it is a negative development. Discuss with both views and give your own opinion.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for research. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that the good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that leadership qualities can be obtained during the life.

Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.