The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The diagram illustrates the sales of online shopping for different items in New Zealand for two years, with a decade separating both of them. From an

overall

perspective, the Travel sector took the largest portion of the number of sales in 2003, but

then

it decreased, leading to Film/Music being the largest percentage in 2013.

Furthermore

, both the Tour and the Movie/Music sectors occupied more than half of the charts in both years. Observing the details,

although

the Books item was in the

last

place in 2003, it went up from 19% to 22% in 2013, leading it to become in a better place: the third.

Similarly

, the Movie/Music portion rose from just 21% to 33%.

On the other hand

, the sales of Clothes fell by about 8 per cent (from 24% to 16%) throughout

this

10-year period, just like what happened to the Travel part. In conclusion, we can say that people tend nowadays to go on trips and buy clothes less but read more.

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The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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