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the cross below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007

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The line graph provides data about the number of
car
ownerships
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 in Great Britain. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
, the total figures of
car
driver
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drivers
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 in the UK rose significantly over the 36-year period. The most considerable increase was seen in drivers having two
cars
. The percentages for people who owned two
cars
 in 1971,
contains
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 almost one in ten
while
 the rate for
car
 drivers having only one
car
 was responsible for almost 45
percent
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, being higher than people owning no
car
, of almost with three or more vehicles in the same year. Figures for carmen who drive two
cars
 witnessed a dramatic rise to nearly over four-fold increase.
While
car
 users, possessing three or more
cars
 saw four times growth in the second year, trends for people with no
car
 fell considerably to a drop of over halved (25%). When it comes to drivers using only one automobile, there was no
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significant change, experiencing
stabile
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stable
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 trends.
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