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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We as a society comprise
of
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lots of individuals with different personalities and preferences. One particular example has something to do with whether
people
 prefer to discover new
things
 in life or to be content with
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 surroundings and stick with their daily
routine
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.
Firstly
, we take a look at the
behavior
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 of the group who would love to try new
things
, whether going to a new diner just opened around the corner,
or
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playing at an arcade
center
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that is
 hidden in the alley or just simply changing your outfits for a Sunday morning. These
people
 usually seek for the excitement in new
things
. They can have a strong sense of curiosity and can be very adventurous
who
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 will ask the question "What?" and head-on with it without hesitation.
As a result
,
life
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 of an individual who
feel
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 fulfilled in discovering a new thing can be very exciting.
Moreover
, they can feel surprised to discover a new side of themselves.
However
, constantly looking for a new thing can raise their bar of expectation
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 excitement and curiosity can
also
 meet with disappointment. It is a roller coaster of emotions, like how one of my friends reacted when realizing that the sushi at the new restaurant was not actually as delicious as the one we ordered at home every weekend.
On the contrary
, though, it is always stable,
calm
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 when we refer to the second group of
people
 who find
the
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joy in doing the same
things
 over and over again. They feel familiar
seeing
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 the same
things
,
doing
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and doing
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 the same
works
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 every day.
For example
, they know for sure that they will not have to drive out of town to buy a bottle of soy sauce since that shop run by the old man near the butcher shop has that. It is a sense of
comfortability
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 and safety knowing that it is the usual way to go, the usual way to work. Not only
they
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 feel familiar with the surroundings
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the surroundings
also
 become familiar with their appearance. In my own experience, I always find it
pleasure
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 when walking into a restaurant as a regular,
instead
 of going through their menu and spending
times
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on
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deciding what to eat, I can just say to the waiter/waitress "Just the usual, please!" and they know for sure what to bring to me. I feel connected with the place, and more broadly, the community. The only downside,
however
, is the lack of motivation for new
things
.
Consequently
,
people
 can find
themselves
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 difficult to adjust
with
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 the changes, which will happen inevitably.
To
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 summary, there are different
people
 who seek pleasure in trying new
things
 or doing
things
 in a routine. Both can justify easily their own reasoning
on
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 their behavior. For me, living in a small town seems to shape
up
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my preference
on
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 doing
things
 in a routine.
However
, once in a
while
, I love coming up with something new in order not to get bored
on
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 my life.
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task achievement
Expand on the advantages and disadvantages of trying new things and sticking with familiar routines.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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