The bar chart shows the ammount spent on digital games in the USA and China from 2010 to 2017 and the pie chart shows global spending on these games in 2017.

The bar chart shows the ammount spent on digital games in the USA and China from 2010 to 2017 and the pie chart shows global spending on these games in 2017.
The chart below illustrates information about four different countries
traveller
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who
visit
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Greece in August 2019 and
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different
type
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types
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of hobbies.
According to
the information provided, we can see that
Chinese
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the Chinese
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are the
most
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apply
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tourists
who
spent
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time
on
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reading books
at
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during
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their fun
time
.
In contrast
,
Brazilian
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enjoy spending most of their
time
at the beach. Meanwhile,
Chinese
tourists
and
Brazilian
tourists
both
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didn’t
spent
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much
time
on
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Visiting places. If we look more closely, we notice that
Chinese
tourists
spend 8 hours Reading books.
In contrast
,
Brazilian
spent 6 hours at the beach. Meanwhile, American and Turkish
tourists
spent 3 hours visiting places. To summarize, the chart shows that
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the chinese
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chinese
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interested
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in spending
time
reading rather than other leisure activities.
While
American
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Americans
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, Turkish and
brazilian
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Brazilians
interested
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are interested
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to do
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in doing
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other activities more than Reading.
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