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In many nations , only a minority of young people are willing to do unpaid community service .There are many arguments that shows many negative outcomes because of this problem and the best solution arein demand.

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In today’s contemporary society, the world has been confronted with the escalation of the phenomenon in which very few juveniles are inclined to do unpaid
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service
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 results in a plethora of consequences and
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 of the best ways to solve those consequences. It is evident that it can be
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 young individuals who unwillingly do unpaid
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service
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 driving problem is the amount of time it takes for young
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 to do those assignments since those who
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 under 16 are not mature enough to help the elderly work on renovation projects or teach younger students without adult supervision, which may
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 create extra tasks for the charities.
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, teenagers who are taking courses in high school may lack time to do voluntary work.
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, the graduation exam is
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 of the most significant ambitions that most
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 students aim for after
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 taking the official curriculum.
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 leads to the potentially insensitive future generations of the society. It
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 becomes incumbent upon the government to oversee, not knowing the lack of label force.
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, addressing the declining engagement of young
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 in unpaid
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 is imperative to mitigate the multitude of issues arising from
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 phenomenon.
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 of the solutions is incorporating unpaid
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 into
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 school curriculum.
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 approach not only helps schools incorporate a sense of civic responsibility and
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 engagement into student's mindset from an early age
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 but
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 effectively addresses the problems associated with the reluctance of young
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 to participate in unpaid
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, albeit a collective
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 including all stakeholders to come up with an easier way to approach students is required. In conclusion, incorporating
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 into the school curriculum is a promising solution to engage young
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 in unpaid
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. Collaboration among stakeholders is key to its success, ultimately shaping a more socially responsible and engaged youth for a brighter future.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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