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In many nations , only a minority of young people are willing to do unpaid community service .There are many arguments that shows many negative outcomes because of this problem and the best solution arein demand.

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In today’s contemporary society, the world has been confronted with the escalation of the phenomenon in which very few juveniles are inclined to do unpaid
community
service
.
Thus
this
 results in a plethora of consequences and
this
 essay will provide the assessment of suggesting
one
 of the best ways to solve those consequences. It is evident that it can be
a harm
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for
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 young individuals who unwillingly do unpaid
community
service
.
One
 driving problem is the amount of time it takes for young
people
 to do those assignments since those who
age
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 under 16 are not mature enough to help the elderly work on renovation projects or teach younger students without adult supervision, which may
also
 create extra tasks for the charities.
In other words
, teenagers who are taking courses in high school may lack time to do voluntary work.
Also
, the graduation exam is
one
 of the most significant ambitions that most
12th grade
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 students aim for after
12-year
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12 years of
 constant studying, especially
while
 taking the official curriculum.
In addition
, it
also
 leads to the potentially insensitive future generations of the society. It
also
 becomes incumbent upon the government to oversee, not knowing the lack of label force.
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, addressing the declining engagement of young
people
 in unpaid
community
service
 is imperative to mitigate the multitude of issues arising from
this
 phenomenon.
One
 of the solutions is incorporating unpaid
community
service
 into
compulsory
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 school curriculum.
This
 approach not only helps schools incorporate a sense of civic responsibility and
community
 engagement into student's mindset from an early age
,
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 but
also
 effectively addresses the problems associated with the reluctance of young
people
 to participate in unpaid
community
service
, albeit a collective
endeavor
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 including all stakeholders to come up with an easier way to approach students is required. In conclusion, incorporating
community
service
 into the school curriculum is a promising solution to engage young
people
 in unpaid
service
. Collaboration among stakeholders is key to its success, ultimately shaping a more socially responsible and engaged youth for a brighter future.
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