Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned. Others, however, believe that people should be free to choose sports activities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are individuals who believe that risky
games
should be reduced,
while
others argue that to choose physical
activities
freely.
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discuss
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both
of
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views and
subsequently
present
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my own opinions on the matter. Supporters of the idea dangerous
sports
should be banned say that some
of
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sport
games
leads to death,
such
as MMA, UFC, and escape
games
. In fact
that
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aproximently
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approximately
15%
gamers
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die
while
sport
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sports
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fights every year.
Additionally
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the
risks
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activities
like mountain climbing, motor racing, and base jumping are high levels of danger. Those
sport
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games
harmful
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for
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individual's health and safety. The danger spots cause
to
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them to
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become invalids.
On the other hand
perspectives
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perspective
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of
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people should be free to select
sports
activities
think
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that freedom
activities
invite high mood events, interesting
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, and motivate to lives. And they  say that banning dangerous
sports
would
limited
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people's ability and reduce their hobbies, even
it
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leads to becoming more isolated. In fact
that
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about 70%
males
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keen
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on
to watch
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danger
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sports
and playing them. In summary, banning dangerous
sports
and freedom
activities
are equally important for
well-being
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and
developing
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in
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society.  I prefer to reduce
risks
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risky
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activities
and provide
safety
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lifestyles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public safety
  • strain on public health resources
  • individual freedom
  • autonomy
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • sense of accomplishment
  • proper regulations
  • safety measures
  • economic benefits
  • revenue from tourism
  • hosting events
  • injuries
  • fatalities
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