the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2030

the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2030
The line chart elucidates the number of UK commuters travelling on a regular basis in three popular vehicles namely
car
,
bus
and
train
. In general,
while
the total
quanties
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number
of individuals who travel by
car
and
train
are
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is
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predicted to witness an increasing trend over the period, the opposite side is
forcasted
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forecasted
to be true for that of
Bus
. In 1970,
Car
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the Car
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was the most prevalent
mean
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means
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of transport for commuters in the UK, which accounted for 5
million
, 2 and 4
million
higher than those of
Bus
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the Bus
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and
Train
respectively. In the next thirty years,
while
around 7
million
people use
car
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the car
a car
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to transport and exactly 3
for
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by
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Train
, the figure for
Bus
dwindled slightly to nearly 3
million
during the time depicted. By 2030, the number of commuters
travel
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by
car
is expected to have a dramatic
escaltion
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escalation
to 9
million
, and that of
Train
is forecasted to surge to 5
million
.
Conversely
, the figure for
Bus
is foreseen to plummet and terminate at 3
million
people.
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