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the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2030

the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2030
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The line chart elucidates the number of UK commuters travelling on a regular basis in three popular vehicles namely
car
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,
bus
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 and
train
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. In general,
while
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 the total
quanties
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number
 of individuals who travel by
car
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 and
train
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are
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is
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 predicted to witness an increasing trend over the period, the opposite side is
forcasted
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forecasted
 to be true for that of
Bus
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. In 1970,
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Car
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the Car
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 was the most prevalent
mean
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means
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 of transport for commuters in the UK, which accounted for 5
million
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 , 2 and 4
million
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 higher than those of
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Bus
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the Bus
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 and
Train
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 respectively. In the next thirty years,
while
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 around 7
million
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 people use
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car
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the car
a car
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 to transport and exactly 3
for
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by
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Train
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, the figure for
Bus
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 dwindled slightly to nearly 3
million
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 during the time depicted. By 2030, the number of commuters
travel
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travelling
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 by
car
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 is expected to have a dramatic
escaltion
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escalation
 to 9
million
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, and that of
Train
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 is forecasted to surge to 5
million
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.
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, the figure for
Bus
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 is foreseen to plummet and terminate at 3
million
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 people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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