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The line graph shows the population figure of different types of turtles in india between1980 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.

The line graph shows the population figure of different types of turtles in india between1980 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.
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 line graph illustrates the populace data of various turtle species in India from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, the figures
of
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 all four fluctuated a lot
throught
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through
throughout
 the years the of
the
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apply
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Olive Ridley
Turtles
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have
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 increased over time, contrary to that,the proportion of Leatherback
Turtles
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have
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 plummeted dramatically .
To begin
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 with, in 1980 the proportion of all four categories was 100.
Proportion
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 of Olive ridley
turtles
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 rose until 1996, after which
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this
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 figures remained inconsistent eventually stopping at 125 in 2012.
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, in the case of
leather back
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leatherback
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turtles
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, the figures saw a lot of fluctuations since 1887 when they were at 109 which decreased to 60. Other species and green
turtles
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also
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 had their share of peaks and troughs, but the
later
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 fell to the third place at 95 with marginal decline and the prior ones were placed second at 110.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph illustrates
  • depicts
  • changes
  • population figures
  • types of turtles
  • Olive Ridley
  • Leatherback
  • Green turtles
  • measured in thousands
  • the highest
  • followed by
  • remained stable
  • significant decline
  • decreased sharply
  • reached its lowest point
  • gradual increase
  • increased steadily
  • experienced a slight decline
  • remained relatively stable
  • fluctuations
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