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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected these regions of the world the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected these regions of the world the 1990s.
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The pie chart illustrates the most important reasons for low productivity in agricultural land and the table gives information about three regions namely, North America, Europe and Oceania which faced these causes during
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1990.
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, the highest and lowest percentage of over-grazing and other reasons is 35% and 7% respectively. Looking in
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deforestation
 proportion was lower than over-grazing
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 main reason in Europe with
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23% of total
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worldwide .
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, in
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Oceania
 the rate of over-cultivation was zero which means it was not an
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 in
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 area.
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 causes
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 as over-grazing was more effective with 11.3%.
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, 5% of total land degraded
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 to north america given that,
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the deforstation
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deforstation
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deforestation
 rate was lower than
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casuse
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causes
 and it was 0.2% until 1990.
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