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The line graph shows the population figure of different types of turtles in india between1980 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.

The line graph shows the population figure of different types of turtles in india between1980 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.
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The line graph illustrates the number of different
species
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 of
turtles
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 living in India from the
year
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 1980 to 2012.
Overall
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 the population of the different
species
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 of
turtles
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 were the same, but over the years
this
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 trend changed. The Leatherback
Turtles
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 showed the highest reduction from the first
year
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 to the
last
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 one, whilst the proportion of the Olive Ridley
Turtles
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 presented the highest increase. The figures for the Leatherback
Turtles
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 decreased
betwee
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between
 1988 to 2012, after having an
inconscistent
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inconsistent
 increase
in
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from
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 1980 to 1987, the number of its
populations
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population
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 went from 100 to 60 in 2012.
On the other hand
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, despite some fluctuations, the
species
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 of Olive Ridley
turtles
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 had
increase
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increased
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 from 100 to over 130 in the
year
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 2012. For Green
Turtles
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, the trend was less consistent, having some fluctuations during the period but ending with a similar figure as when it started, from 100 in the first
year
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 to a
liitle
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little
 bit more than 100 in the
last
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year
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. Between the period, the numbers for All
Species
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 followed a similar pattern, presenting some fluctuations but not growing a lot, starting with 100 and ending with almost the same number.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words species, turtles, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph illustrates
  • depicts
  • changes
  • population figures
  • types of turtles
  • Olive Ridley
  • Leatherback
  • Green turtles
  • measured in thousands
  • the highest
  • followed by
  • remained stable
  • significant decline
  • decreased sharply
  • reached its lowest point
  • gradual increase
  • increased steadily
  • experienced a slight decline
  • remained relatively stable
  • fluctuations
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