Some poeple say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in thie free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on thier own. ' Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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different
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their
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children
join to
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organised
group
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activities
others are not.
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explain
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both organized
group
activities and free time. On the one hand,
group
activities
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to
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children
growing. İt
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makes
increase their
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relationship
relationships
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realize
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parents
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choosing
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way.
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son who is 12 years old,
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was very
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shy
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then
his father
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a decision for his son and the boy started
group
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therapy. when the boy played his
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that loss
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shining
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finally
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his
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character
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in their free time. İt has positive
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and negative side
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, they may
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get bored and live depressed because all
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children
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are strong
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are not.
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, if
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they
may not be depresed, they will be strong people because they will learn how to occupy themselves on
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their
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played
everytimes
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everytime
alone and she has
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strongly
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scology
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ecology
psychology
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thanks to
played
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alone, not
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others
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friands
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friends
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.
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, the to way
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important because
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is correct.
İn
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In
my opinion we have to the
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way to
according to
children. Some
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children
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to play with
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because they can be happy with
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friends
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while
games.
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can
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a lot of things thanks to games.
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