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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. ​ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
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Across the globe, the
Price
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 of
everythingis
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everything is
everything
 rising with the
increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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pollution
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 .
However
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, the
price
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 of Petrol which is increasing
help
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helps
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 in
reduces
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reducing
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 the
traffic
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 which helps in
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pollution related
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pollution-related
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problem
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 to decrease . The main
Reason
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reason
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 behind that
it
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is it
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 will help in reducing the
vehicles
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number of vehicles
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 and it will decrease
the
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apply
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pollution
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.
To begin
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 with, The rise in
oil
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the oil
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 rate will help in reducing
traffic
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 because of
less vehicle
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fewer vehicles
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 there is no
problem
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traffic
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with traffic
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.
For example
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, The less vehicle
help
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 the transport company to earn more money and it will
also
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 save the People money too.
moreover
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, it will help the Job people and School going to reach
there
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their
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 place
at
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on
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 time because of less
traffic
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 and less congestion . it will help in decreasing the
pollution
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 which is coming from
the
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apply
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vehicles
vand
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and
 help in Keeping the environment clean.
on the contrary
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,
This
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Price
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 creates
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problem
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a problem
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 for people who
has
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have
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 their own vehicles and they find
comfortable
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it comfortable
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 to go from one place to another without any hurdles but due
increasing
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increase
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 in
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Price
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the Price
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 of oil
it
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apply
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will
creates
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create
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problem
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a problem
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 for them to save their money as they have to look after their family . Even, the issue related to
pollution
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 will not decrease by looking
on
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at
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 one aspect only.
Hence
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,
by
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apply
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increasing the
price
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 will not help in
such
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 things .
To Sum up
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, the
price
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 of
bill
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the bill
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 will help during the congestion on
road
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the road
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 and
also
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 reduce
pollution
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. But
according to
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 me, it will not help
in
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to
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 reduce
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problem
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the problem
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 of
traffic
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 and
Pollution
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 because there are many other
reason
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reasons
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which create
Pollution
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such
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 as water
pollution
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, noise
pollution
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 etc.
Therefore
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, it will help only to some
extend
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extent
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 to reduce it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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