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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as Sahara desert or antarctica . What are the benefits and disadvantages of people visiting there .

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Travelling to different
places
 is a hobby for many
people
, who love adventure. They always want to discover difficult and the hardest
places
 like Antarctica or the Sahara desert. In my opinion, visiting that kind of area is not just a hobby of a traveller, It is
also
 the reason for showing others how much courage they have. In
this
 essay, I will discuss positive
as well as
 negative views and try to explain why
people
 like to see
such
 kinds of beard areas. There are many benefits we can find to travelling in
such
 a field. The main advantage is the invention of new ideas. A student who studies geography and biology can research their conditions and try to get possible results on how can humans survive in these unconditional areas and who can use their available natural resources. Another advantage is to building of a scientific research centre. Many countries try to reach
this
 range and establish research like America, China, and Russia WHICH already operate space centres,
however
, they found the reason for global warming as well.
On the other hand
, we can
also
 find some disadvantages.
Firstly
, chances of physical illness. Going to visit
such
 kind of uncomfortable region always increases the chances of health problems. Too high and low temperatures are not acceptable to our bodies. Normal
People
 can not go to the boiling and frozen point surface,
however
, they need to get training before going to
this
 region.
Secondly
, the other disadvantage is the waste of money. A normal person who loves nature should go to hilly areas. Wild lovers can go to a jungle safari for fun and they enjoy it.
Moreover
, there is no reason to go to see the desert and ice,
that is
 only a waste of money and time. In conclusion,
people
 who want to study unusual nature should train first
then
 they can go to visit these
places
. Nobody can go to these
places
 to show off themself. Everyone likes to go there to feel proud of themself and test their real unconditional nature.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecotourism
  • sustainable travel
  • indigenous
  • remote
  • ecosystem
  • preservation
  • exploitation
  • consumerism
  • authentic experience
  • footprint
  • habitats
  • infrastructure
  • biodiversity
  • carbon offset
  • endangered species
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