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The bar chart compares female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart compares female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
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The bar chart depicts
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rates of
female
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females
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 in 4 areas in
UK
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the UK
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. The rates dropped in England, Wales and Northern Ireland, and only
rised
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rose
 in Scotland. The
rate
 in Northern Ireland dropped the most, with 1% in total. The rates of
th
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the
 other two areas dropped slightly with 0.3% in England and 0.4% in Wales. The
rate
 of Scotland increased from 2013 to 2014, and ranked the top 1 with 6.7%,
while
 in 2013, England was the top one with
the
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a
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rate
 of 6.8%.
Overall
, Scotland is the only country
that
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where
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 the
rate
 increased than
last
 year, and
reach
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reached
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 the peak among
4
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the 4
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countries.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • female unemployment rates
  • four countries of the UK
  • 2013
  • 2014
  • introduce
  • overview
  • describe
  • summarize
  • observations
  • comments
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