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Advantages and disadvantages of educating boys and girls in the same class at schools.

#boys #girls #class #schools
According to the statistics, more than 55
percent
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 of children are educated in mixed
schools
. So
that
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, there are some advantages and disadvantages of educating boys and girls in the same classes at
schools
. Most humans are discussing
this
 issue. At
this
 time, strong arguments exist to support
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both sides of
this
 debate, which implies that it is worth examining both points of view before reaching any conclusion. One obvious benefit of schooling
youngesters
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youngsters
 in the same
schools
 is that
,
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 they can learn how to communicate with other individuals . An additional benefit to
this
 is youngers who study
at
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 mixed classes can discuss
about
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some subjects. As the thinking of people is not the same as others.
Therefore
, when they change ideas schoolchildren will have more opinions and their worldview increases.
Finally
, the idea of educating children in mixed classes at school should not be neglected, because it adds more weight
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the argument.
Nonetheless
, there is one very convincing point for teaching children in mixed
schools
 that, after
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 time they will make some confrontations.
As a result
, they do not want to keep in touch
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with each
others
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 or do not want to study in one class. Eventually, it is claimed that
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 features prove to show another negative side of the matter.
To sum up
, my subjective view on
this
 contentious problem is
although
 there are many benefits of educating boys and girls, we can not say, there are not any drawbacks of
this
.
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