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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report fo a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report fo a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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Dear Mr. X; London's one of
the
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apply
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small
village
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villages
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 namely Chorleywood
is
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consist
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consisted
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 of various transportation choices
for instance
 by car and by train for many years, and the civilization
wslightly
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slightly
 condensed near the gold course between the main road and the
railway
 where now full of developed areas. The old main road is connected to
railway
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the railway
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, not only is
the
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it the
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 most important and central
regions
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region
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 but
also
this
 is the place for tourists that
visiting
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visit
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 by
trains
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train
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.
By
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For
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this
reasons
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reason
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, most of the shops and houses of the locals
centered
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 near the
railway
, in other saying the centre of attention. Built
places
 and developments sharply increased between 1970-1994 compared to earlier years.
Consequently
,
the
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most of the
places
 that remained
empy
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empty
are
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were
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 the
places
 far from
railway
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the railway
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 even
tough
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though
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 these
places
 are close to
the
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Chorleywood
park
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Park
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 and
golf
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the golf
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 course.
In addition
, we can obviously see that
places
 around the
railway
 are the most aged constructions among others.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, places with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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