Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report fo a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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Dear Mr. X;
London's one of
the
small Correct article usage
apply
village
namely Chorleywood Fix the agreement mistake
villages
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
consist
of various transportation choices Wrong verb form
consisted
for instance
by car and by train for many years, and the civilization Linking Words
wslightly
condensed near the gold course between the main road and the Correct your spelling
slightly
railway
where now full of developed areas. The old main road is connected to Use synonyms
Use synonyms
railway
, not only is Add an article
the railway
the
most important and central Correct pronoun usage
it the
regions
but Fix the agreement mistake
region
also
Linking Words
this
is the place for tourists that Linking Words
visiting
by Wrong verb form
visit
trains
. Fix the agreement mistake
train
By
Change preposition
For
this
Linking Words
reasons
, most of the shops and houses of the locals Fix the agreement mistake
reason
centered
near the Add a missing verb
are centered
railway
, in other saying the centre of attention. Built Use synonyms
places
and developments sharply increased between 1970-1994 compared to earlier years. Use synonyms
Consequently
, Linking Words
the
most of the Correct article usage
apply
places
that remained Use synonyms
empy
Correct your spelling
empty
are
the Wrong verb form
were
places
far from Use synonyms
Use synonyms
railway
even Correct article usage
the railway
tough
these Correct your spelling
though
places
are close to Use synonyms
the
Chorleywood Correct article usage
apply
park
and Capitalize word
Park
golf
course. Correct article usage
the golf
In addition
, we can obviously see that Linking Words
places
around the Use synonyms
railway
are the most aged constructions among others.Use synonyms
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