Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care. This was not so in the past. What may be the root cause of this behaviour? Discuss the reasons and possible results.

For the time being, the
beauty
industry is the one in which
hefty
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amount is
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by both males and females as compared to the past expenditure.The root causes and
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consequences will be
dicussed
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discussed
in the upcoming paragraphs.
Although
there are many reasons
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overspending on
beauty
products, the most prominent is to imitate the actors and
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actresses
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. To explicate, the advertisements of
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brands leave their unforgettable image in the minds of individuals,that's why
instead
of using
homeremidies
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home remedies
, they just follow their role
moodel
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model
models
.
For instance
, the prominent company Olay promoted their product under eye brightening cream, youngones
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these commercials blindly,
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this
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the purchase. Another reason is Job opportunities because
asthetic
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aesthetic
beauty
is appreciated by everyone
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in the
pofession
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position
of cashier, travel
agents
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etc.
Thus
, for the improvement in
personality
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these
proucts
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products
are used. The ramifications of these materials
leads
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to the loss of natural
beauty
, the commercialized products by themselves are rarely used by
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famous personalities;
however
,the youngsters opt for
beauty
surgerioes
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surgeries
due to
being presented and supported by their
exampler
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example
. But, these treatments actually hurt their skin and
consequently
become dull.
Moreover
in order to support these things ,they overspend the money which should be utilized for education, paying
mortages
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mortgages
,
rent
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and rent
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.
Therefore
, their
hardwork
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hard work
is
going
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redundant as it's not only hurting their body,
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but also
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putting their future in hardship.
To conclude
, to appreciate and follow
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someone
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is
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fruitful
,
nevertheless
firstly
the implications of these treatments or merchandise should be done before trying,
otherwise
it may permanently affect the skin.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media influence
  • idealized beauty standards
  • disposable income
  • economic prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • beauty products and services
  • cultural shifts
  • social contexts
  • personal health and wellness
  • self-care routines
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