Rich countries should not employ skilled workers labour from poor countries,as poor countries need the workers more. Do you agree or disagree

An increasing concern for many
people
around the world is
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the importance
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of skilled
workers
.
while
it can be argued that the number of
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whose necessity
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very crucial in poor
countries
,another opinion is that the number of
workers
who
have
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skilled and
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belong
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to poor
countries
necessary
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to
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in rich
countries
. In
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I will examine both sides of the argument and provide my
overall
opinion. Generally speaking, there are a wide range of reasons
that
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why
people
believe that
the
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workers
who are intelligent not necessary to employ in rich
countries
from poor
Countries
. Perhaps the main reason why
people
are in favour of
this
idea is because they
are
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have
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already developed their
countries
but if they
are
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want to more develop in their
countries
they can make
such
intelligent
workers
who will
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their own
countries
.
perhaps
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the strongest argument in favour of
this
viewpoint is in the area of bright students.
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USA, UK, Australia,
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Canada
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and so on. After
then
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they
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back to their own country, they can easily improve their nation. On the
othar
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other
hand, there are
also
strong arguments for the idea that in poor
countries
skilled
workers
are crucial important. Perhaps the main reason why
people
think that intelligent
workers
are necessary in undeveloped or developing
countries
. A good illustration of
this
is that the developing
countries
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countries'
country's
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economic
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depends
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depend
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on their expert
labours
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labour
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.
As a result
, they
neeed
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need
the brilliant
workers
more. A
further
point of expertise is that
workers
from poor
countries
earn more and
then
this
money through
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in their own
countries
can be
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slightly. In conclusion,
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necessary
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necessity
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of expert labour is a topic which is very relevant to modern society. I believe strongly that the poor
countries
have importance themselves brilliant labour.If the government take some measure, it will provide
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better development for developing 
countries
.
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