The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below gives information on changes
about
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the
propotion
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proportion
of citizens who were born in
Australia
and outside the country residing in other places from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that a large percentage of
people
were born in
cities
regardless of the country and the year.
According to
the data, the largest proportion of
people
, 60%, was born in
cities
outside
the
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Australia
in 1995,
whereas
the smallest one,
appromixately
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approximately
15%,
in
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was in
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towns. Another key finding is that in 1995 there
are
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more
people
were
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born in rural areas both in
Australia
and outside, 25% and 40% respectively. It can be seen from 2010 that the
the
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smallest position on the chart
are
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people
who were born in rural areas outside
Australia
(
near
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10%),
while
the biggest one is
people
from
cities
outside the country (60%). What is more,
people
from rural areas and
cities
of
Australia
are
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were
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rated equally, at about 17
percent
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per cent
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, in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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