The bar chart compares the amount of money (in millions of euros) that people in four different age groups from Paris, France, spent on going to the cinema, restaurants and music concerts in 2019.

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The line graph

illustrate

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the ratio of young people that

playing

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different outdoor sports in four categories from 1900 to nowadays.

Overall

swimming

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the swimming

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category show and rose significantly from 1990 to

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day, compared with ball games and biking/roller skating.

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the group jogging/running rose

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in the given

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. Swimming started the

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below 15%,

then

from 1995 to

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present

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increased

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increase

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constantly and

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the given

period

as a lead of outdoor sports.

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, jogging/running rose from over 5% in 1990 to below 15% in 2000,

then

showed

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slight

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the

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with 15%.

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, ball games began the

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as lead sport with nearly 35% of participation

then

decreased dramatically to close 20% at the present day.

Liwise

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, biking/roller skating started as

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popular

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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The bar chart compares the amount of money (in millions of euros) that people in four different age groups from Paris, France, spent on going to the cinema, restaurants and music concerts in 2019.

Many people like having a fixed daily routine, while others enjoy the change in their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say History is obe of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History

Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree