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Harry kovacs is a 5 year old boy who is the son of one of your newly referred patients in the community mental health centre where you are a mental health case manager.

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I am writing to refer master harry who
has
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 suspected
have
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of having
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 separation anxiety disorder .He requires your care and
futher
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further
 assessment. Harry started to show some signs of separation anxiety after his
mother
 Mrs.Elizabeth hospital admission,
Who has
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 had major depression and psychotic features.
she
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 was admitted
in
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hospital
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the hospital
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 for dsh attempt.Recently he cries and panics whenever his
mother
 leaves his sight .He was
social
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 withdrawn and
refusing
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 to attend
kindergarden
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kindergarten
.
In addition
 to that he has increased
insomia
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insomnia
 and
nightmare
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nightmares
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.He has preoccupied thoughts regarding his
mother
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 daily activities and that she might leave him again. Harry lives with his
mother
 and father .His father was
self employed
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self-employed
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 and rarely
visit
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 to house.Harry states that his father
do
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 not like him.
Hw
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He
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 has had medical history of eczema. I would highly
appreciated
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,
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if
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 you could do an assessment for
harry
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Harry
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 and manage his condition.Kindly make an arrangement for
joint
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a joint
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 meeting with
case
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a case
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 manager and his
mother
. If you have any
queriers
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queries
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 please don't hesitate to contact me. yours sincerely, case manager.
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