The chart illustrates the stages of production of electricity in a hydroelectric power station.

The chart illustrates the stages of production of electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
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The provided diagram illustrates the process of
electricity
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manufacture in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
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,
it is clear that
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there are several stages in the production of
electricity
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. The process begins with
intake
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the intake
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water
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of water
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and ends at the generator
power
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station
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. Looking
at the first
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stage
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of
the
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apply
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electricity
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production,
water
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are
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is
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collected by
reservoiring
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reservoirs
reservoir
from
river
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the river
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. At
daytime
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the daytime
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door
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the door
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of the dam
opened
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opens
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and
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water
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the water
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are
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is
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intaked
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intake
intact
. In the second
stage
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,
water
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was flowed
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flowed
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to
generated
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generate
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electricity
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at
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during
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daytime
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the daytime
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. Next
stage
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,
water
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was flowed
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flows
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into reversible turbines
at
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during
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daytime
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the daytime
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which
is
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are
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operated generator in
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power
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the power
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station
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and
sent
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send
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electricity
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to
power
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lines. At
the
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night-time, the dam's door closed and
water
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was pumped from
low-level
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the low-level
a low-level
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reservoir. Next
stage
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, reversible turbines
were pumped
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pump
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water
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into
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir to
collected
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collect
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water
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until
next
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the next
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electricity
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production.
Finally
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, there were 2
period
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periods
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that relevant to
process
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the process
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of
electricity
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manufacture in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, station, water, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • stages of production
  • chart
  • illustrates
  • description
  • process
  • advantages
  • electricity
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable
  • dam
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generator
  • transformer
  • transmission lines
  • environmentally friendly
  • cost-effective
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