People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times. What is the cause? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

Nowadays, individuals prefer to stay in the same city throughout their entire lives
however
, they now often
change
where they reside many times. In my opinion, I believe
this
is a positive trend and
this
essay will examine the causes why most
people
decide to
change
where they live.
Firstly
, lack of security in the country is one of the major problems why individuals choose to leave where they stay every time.
In other words
, both teenagers and adults do not feel safe and secure around their
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due to
the fact that armed robbers break into their
home
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every night.
For example
, thieves can steal important personal possessions away from them and
this
can result in traumatic experiences most times which affects their mental health.
In addition
, the cases of rape have increased significantly in Nigeria. Young girls do not feel safe around their
home
and they don't have the right to put on any clothes of their choice
due to
the fact that men are always attracted to them sexually.
Consequently
, they deal with the trauma emotionally throughout their lives and at times some ladies
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their ability to give birth in the future.
Secondly
,
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advancement is
also
an important factor
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people
choose to
change
their homes.
This
is because some modern buildings have now been constructed in a reserved area or location and
this
is a good development for the city.
For example
, most parents that work from
home
find it difficult to attend business meetings online due
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internet connection.
However
,
people
are now able to access a 24-hour power supply and internet connectivity in their apartments. There's no doubt that
this
has not helped to reduce the stress individuals go through in the search for new houses. In conclusion, despite the fact that
people
always intend to
change
where they live,
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believe it is important for citizens to do so in order to promote security awareness in the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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