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it is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for high proportion of young people . To what entent do you agree or disagree

#university #places #proportion #people #entent
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Every student has the right to have an education, but the problem is when it comes to getting a place in a university because of the high level of demand that exists. Some universities would want to give
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 opportunity to
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 but
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 essay, I will explain why even if all schools could give an opportunity to study to every student, would not be beneficial for
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. First of all, it is very common that when a student wants to get into any college they have to do an exam first in order to get admitted.
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 is a technique that schools use to select very carefully the number and the type of people who are going to study in their institutes and of course to even increase their reputation. It's not the same as applying to a community college as applying to an Ivy League, not
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 can go to the
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 option for the reasons that were mentioned.
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, if
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 could get
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 opportunity of having a place in the uni they want it would simply be impossible
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 many factors, like lack of teachers, or lack of structure of the building if an institution decides to have a lot of students
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 it would have to think about handing more opportunities. Even though
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 has the right to get an education it is impossible for universities
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, because there are a lot of students nowadays who are searching for the same opportunities and at some point they they have to compete to win a place.
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