The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 120 words.

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 120 words.
The given line chart described
population
Correct article usage
the population
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in the three
city
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cities
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(
Columbia
,
Yamhill
, Washington)
where
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that
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belong
Wrong verb form
belonged
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to
state
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the state
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of Oregon between 1940 and 2000 (in
thousands
). In
general
Add a comma
general,
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over six decades, Washington’s
population
has
bigger
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a bigger
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number than
Yamhil
Correct your spelling
Yamhill
and
Columbia
.
Overall
, the
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
population
for
Columbia
,
Yamhill
and Washington over six decades increased in number with
high
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the high
a high
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pace of growth in Washington
city
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City
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. It can be shown in the graph, there was
an
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a
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gradual
increased
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increase
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in Washington’s
population
from approximately 75
thousands
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thousand
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people
to over 120 thousand
people
from 1940 to 1970
then
it rose dramatically almost
doubled
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doubling
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to 240
thousands
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thousand
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by 2000.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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there was a similar
climbed
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climbing
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pattern for
Yamhill
city
Capitalize word
City
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and
Columbia
city
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City
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. It is clear from
figure
Correct article usage
the figure
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both
Yamhill
and
Columbia
started at
same
Correct article usage
the same
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population
nearly 30
thousands
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thousand
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by 1940 and
then
they climbed slowly almost 45
thousands
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thousand
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people
and over 30 thousand respectively.
Furthermore
, they soared significantly doubled to just over 90
thousands
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thousand
show examples
people
for
Yamhill
and over 60
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
show examples
people
for
Columbia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, city, columbia, yamhill, thousands, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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