The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data provides information on how the total world
energy
consumption and electricity
generation
were distributed
last
year.
Overall
, most of the consumed
energy
came from fossil fuels
such
as oil and gas,
however
, in terms of electricity
generation
, coal was the largest
one
in terms of
generation
. Almost
one third
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of the whole
energy
consumption is dominated by oil,
nevertheless
, only 6.7% of it is generated.
In contrast
, coal, which is the second largest consumed
energy
(25,1%), is the biggest generated
one
(39,8%) surpassing others.
What
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comes to gas,
it's
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its
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amounts in both cases are similar, reaching approximately twenty
percent
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per cent
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, which makes it the only
one
with
such
qualities. It is evident, that hydro power
as well as
nuclear power are generated more than consumed worldwide. Their consumption stays under 7% and
generation
is around 16% percent. What stands out, is the percentages of combustible renewables and waste, which is consumed very little and not generated at all.
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