he table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table diagram above depicts the UK unemployed had
thier
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their
free time on the activities in 1982. The information can be categorised into 4
groups
, which were morning
men
, morning women,
afternoon
men
, and
afternoon
women. As the data
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, it can be seen that the
wowen
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women
tended to do housework the most in their spare time in both
of
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morning and
afternoon
while
the
men
have
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various preferences between the
groups
. It is so clear that the women in both
of
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2
groups
spent their time with housework the most
by
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49% in morning females and 21% in
afternoon
ladies.
Similary
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Similarly
, the secondary activities in both of these of
this
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groups
still
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the same which was shopping by 26% and 17% respectively. In
case
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of
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, the morning
male
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males
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like job hunting the most
by
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22%
while
afternoon
men
have the highest rate
with
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of
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watching TV
by
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14%. All in all, the
male
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males
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tended to be more active in the morning group compared with the
afternoon
group similar to the female
groups
.
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