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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data illustrates the changes in the layout of Lynwish College taken place since 2006.
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, the site has undergone several changes the major ones being the construction of
cafeteria
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a cafeteria
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 and new
sport
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sports
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 facilities
as well as
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and
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the development of a new transportation option. Since 2006, a significant part of green areas have been removed to construct new facilities.
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, the new extended library has been built between two college buildings.
On
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In
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 its old
place
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place,
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 a new sports centre has been opened
in addition
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 to the original sports field nearby. In terms of transportation, a car park has been cut in size to fit a new bike storage for students to safely store their vehicles. To the north, a new path has been created to connect the campus with the new bus stop providing a new transportation option. It has
also
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 become easier for people to eat and buy lunch these days
,
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 since at the centre of the campus a new cafeteria has been built. Previously there were only a few
road
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roads
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 connecting college facilities.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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