The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the changes in the layout of Lynwish College taken place since 2006.
Overall
, the site has undergone several changes the major ones being the construction of
cafeteria
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a cafeteria
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and new
sport
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sports
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facilities
as well as
and
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the development of a new transportation option. Since 2006, a significant part of green areas have been removed to construct new facilities.
For instance
, the new extended library has been built between two college buildings.
On
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In
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its old
place
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place,
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a new sports centre has been opened
in addition
to the original sports field nearby. In terms of transportation, a car park has been cut in size to fit a new bike storage for students to safely store their vehicles. To the north, a new path has been created to connect the campus with the new bus stop providing a new transportation option. It has
also
become easier for people to eat and buy lunch these days
,
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since at the centre of the campus a new cafeteria has been built. Previously there were only a few
road
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roads
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connecting college facilities.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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