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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 amd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compparisons where relevent.

The bar chart depicts the export
value
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 of one country between 2015 and 2016, the figures are given in billion dollars. The categories can divided into 5 groups
as
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apply
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petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, gems and
jewellwery
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jewellery
, agricultural
products
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, and
textilles
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textiles
. It can be seen that petroleum goods were the most of
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value
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the value
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 of the export over the period,
while
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 textiles and agriculture
products
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 were the lowest
value
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 in 2016.
From the
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 data shows, energy
products
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 were the highest
thoughtout
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throughout
 the giving time by
started
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 at 60 in 2015 and
climbed
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climbing
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 up to nearly 63 in 2016.
Similarly
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, Engineered things which were the secondary export
value
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 stayed at close to 60 in
year
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the year
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 2015
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then
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and then
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 slightly grew to around 62% in
year
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the year
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 2016. By the way, even though farmer foods and clothing goods had a slight increase from 30 and around 28 in 2015 to nearly 30 in 2016, there were still the
lowest
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lowest-value
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value
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products
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 in these categories.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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