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Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when | they are used as money-making of attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when | they are used as
money
-making
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attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only
way
 to save these traditions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion Nowadays
culture
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 is used to attract
tourisme
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tourists
, some believe it is a great idea to save
culture
whereas
, others say it will destroy it . I personally with
culture
 to making
money
 it is the best
way
 to save it
Firstly
, if cultural and traditional places are used as tourist locations it would lead to destroying them .
In other words
, visitors from all over the world will visit the
location's
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 and
due to
 huge
use
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 the traditional items may
will
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be destroyed.
For instance
, I visited Sultan Qaboos
fort
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last
 month it is one of the famous places and the place was dirty and crowded.
In addition
 ,the
culture
 may
influence
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 by the
visiters
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visitors
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 who are from different cultures and lose their unique value.
This
 logic means using
culture
 to
making
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money
 will harm the
culture
's hardly.
On the other hand
, the other argument is the only
way
 to save antique pieces is using
cultural
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due to
 it needs special care and a large amount of
money
 so tourism can be used as a resource to get
money
then
 using
this
money
 to save and ticketing care of
culture
.
However
, I believe
on
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traditional as maney making to save
culture
 becomes if they need to preserve
culture
 means they need to build museums and professional workers and all
this
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 services require large amounts of
money
.
For example
, the survey done in 2023 at Sultan Qaboos University showed that the government
spend
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 more than 1000 Omani real to save
culture
.
Therefore
, if they refuse
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making
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culture
as
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a
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resource
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a resource
the resource
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 it will be
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harmful
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harm
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harmful
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for
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 the government budget to keep spending all
this
money
 on
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culture
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cultural
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culture
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. In conclusion,
although
 some argue that cultural traditions may be destroyed when used
as
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money
 making , I think it is the best
way
 to preserve
cultural
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culture
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 because
of
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preserving
expensive
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is expensive
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 and without using
cutler
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a cutler
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 to make
money
 will be difficult to
saving
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save
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 traditional.
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