In some countries, people who are unemployed receive a weekly payment from the government. Some people think that this payment should be stopped and that people should be made to work for their money. Do you agree or disagree?

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Employment opportunities are not everywhere and finding them can be very difficult.

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this

reason

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people

who don'

have a job decide to receive a weekly payment that the government provides. In

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essay, I will explain why

this

is helpful for

the

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society but only momentarily. Nowadays there is a lack of job opportunities and some companies where you can

work

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pay a very bad salary. Especially those who don'

have a high education level have to take those jobs that don'

pay them well in order to survive.

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people

who

work

at restaurants have to do

a very hard

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very hard work

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work

for

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long

period

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of hours and the

payment

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is still very low.

As a

result

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they decide to quit but they still need money so

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the goverment

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goverment

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government

can provide them

that

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help.

On the other hand

, there

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others who think that these unemployed

people

only decide to not

work

because they don'

want to when in most

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the

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cases

that is

not true. In that case,

government

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the government

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should be aware sometimes

this

can happen and only give

this

economic help for a certain period of time or to the ones that are

truthly

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truly

searching for a job. In my opinion, there is nothing wrong in giving others help, if

people

are worried about their taxes because

government

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is giving money to the ones that don'

work

, you can even do the same but it's not a situation where everyone wants to be at neither they decide it.

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