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Someone says that job satisfaction is more important than job security, but others disagree. Discuss both views and address which one do you agree.

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Nowadays, people tend to seek
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work
 that can get them happiness, both happiness
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working
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 life and happiness in
personal
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their personal
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 life.
That is
 the reason why career satisfaction is the ideal topic that people more focusing on significantly, not just only career security like in past. Personally, I agree
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 to happy with
work
 is more significant
more to
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 secure with
work
. In my opinion,
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because
 of my young age, I think I would like to try to
work
 and learn in various industries.
Becuase
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Because
that is
 the way I can expand my skillsets and
expore
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explore
 the passion of
work
 I
truely
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truly
 love.
Hence
, to
happy
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 with
work
 in meaning
job
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 is more significant for me in the present.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, I believe that If I could discover my real passion
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work
. I am going to do it in a better way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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