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Currently, more and more people respect elders and become convinced that old people should live with their families, which is in contrast to the view that old people should live at a nursing home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
the
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family problems. It is undeniable that
elders
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 are one of the
esspesial
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essential
special
part
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 of our life and family.
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether elder should live with their families or at a nursing home. A commonly held belief that
elders
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 have the most respected place in
home
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the home
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. Because they are parents of your parents and they are very old and smart.
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, they have
an
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experience
to
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 teaching a child.
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, children will
observ
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observe
 and understand how to respond, relate and discuss with you according
on
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to
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 your relationship with your parents.
As a
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 we can deduce that grandparents a good example of
best
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 human for a child.
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, others believe that
elders
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 space at a nursing home.
Like
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a
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evidence of
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this
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 they point
to
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 that they
are
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will disturb
wife's
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the wife's
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 and husband's
life
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. As they will
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to
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 them and disturb their relationship.
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Also
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 they think that
to
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them
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they
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needs
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a
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special treatment or diet and they think that they are redundant mouth when coming to eat. Taking all of
things
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 mentioned earlier we can come to the result that elder
people
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just
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are just
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 humans who haven't any benefits to
family
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the family
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 taking all of
things
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the things
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 mentioned previously, my opinion
that
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is that
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elders
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's place in their family. Because I think they are
also
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people
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, even
people
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giving
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a
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birth and
grew
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 you. It is unfair
doing
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 with them
this
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 things. We must respect old
people
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 and carry them, because without them we
weren't
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been
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be
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 here.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional well-being
  • sense of belonging
  • unique insights
  • wisdom
  • family dynamics
  • integration
  • busy household
  • professional care
  • specialized facilities
  • medical needs
  • social isolation
  • intergenerational interaction
  • peer engagement
  • tailored activities
  • financial implications
  • burden
  • professional care facilities
  • evolving perceptions
  • elder care
  • cultural influences
  • social factors
  • economic factors
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