Currently, more and more people respect elders and become convinced that old people should live with their families, which is in contrast to the view that old people should live at a nursing home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
the
family problems. It is undeniable that Correct article usage
apply
elders
are one of the esspesial
Correct your spelling
essential
special
part
of our life and family. Change to a plural noun
parts
However
, there is no absolute agreement on whether elder should live with their families or at a nursing home.
A commonly held belief that elders
have the most respected place in home
. Because they are parents of your parents and they are very old and smart. Add an article
the home
a home
Furthermore
, they have an
experience Correct article usage
apply
to
teaching a child. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, children will observ
and understand how to respond, relate and discuss with you according Correct your spelling
observe
on
your relationship with your parents. Change preposition
to
As a
result
we can deduce that grandparents a good example of Add a comma
result,
best
human for a child.
Correct article usage
the best
On the other hand
, others believe that elders
space at a nursing home. Like
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As
a
evidence of Remove the article
apply
this
they point Add a comma
this,
to
that they Change preposition
out
are
will disturb Unnecessary verb
apply
wife's
and husband's Correct article usage
the wife's
life
. As they will Fix the agreement mistake
lives
yelling
Wrong verb form
yell
to
them and disturb their relationship. Change preposition
at
Also
they think that Add a comma
Also,
to
Change preposition
apply
them
Correct pronoun usage
they
needs
Correct subject-verb agreement
need
a
special treatment or diet and they think that they are redundant mouth when coming to eat. Taking all of Remove the article
apply
things
mentioned earlier we can come to the result that elder Add an article
the things
people
just
humans who haven't any benefits to Add a missing verb
are just
family
.
In Add an article
the family
conclusion
taking all of Add a comma
conclusion,
things
mentioned previously, my opinion Add an article
the things
that
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is that
elders
's place in their family. Because I think they are also
people
, even people
who giving
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give
a
birth and Remove the article
apply
grew
you. It is unfair Wrong verb form
grow
doing
with them Wrong verb form
to do
this
things. We must respect old people
and carry them, because without them we weren't
Verb problem
wouldn't
been
here.Wrong verb form
be
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