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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employment?

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In recent years, self-employment has
been
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risen up, as
people
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 prefer to
work
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 in their own company,
instead
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 of working for others. Being a self-worker may have its pros
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 its cons. In
this
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work
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 career might be the solution. Nowadays,
people
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 have shown their preference
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 self-
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, as with that they earn independence. In fact, by working for themselves, it means that they can have flexible working hours.
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 that, workers are able to
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distribute
 their free time corresponding to their desires. They can,
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,
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 three days in a row and have a leisure trip the following days.
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, individuals may achieve a much higher salary.
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, the more money that can be provided to them, the more luxurious
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 they can have. Despite the fact that individuals who are self-employed may have adequate benefits,
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 they might have negative effects on their
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 as well.
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, being a self-worker
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 has its own risks.
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 working in an organisation can be provided with security, as their salary is fixed every month,
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, to those who are self-employed. Apart from that,
people
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 tend to be more stressed, with no time for enjoyment of
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,
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 the fact that every difficult and demanding decision must be approved by them.
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, as scientists have estimated,
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 who
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 in their own businesses, tend to
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 more health problems,
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, high blood pressure and heart diseases. In a nutshell, being a self-worker may have pros like contributing to a more luxurious
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,
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, it may have
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 cons like ending up in stressful situations leading to health problems. It seems to me that the best solution is a balanced career with enough time to enjoy
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Provide a more balanced argument by exploring both the advantages and disadvantages of self-employment.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction that states your position and provides an outline of the essay.
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Provide more specific examples to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to improve the coherence of your essay.
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