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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reason for this? What are the solutions?

#people #drinks #reason
Nowadays, sugar become a significant ingredient of everything we eat, not only food but
also
drinks
. Sometimes,
there
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it
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 will be easier to find
a sweet
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a sweet drink
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drinks
 than non-sweet
drinks
. The reason is its
sweetness
 and freshness of drinking sweet
drinks
.
However
, sweet
drinks
 cause many health
problems
,
this
 statement I am going to illustrate how to reduce
the
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these
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problems
.
To begin
 with, the main reason that make
sugar-base
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sugar-based
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drinks
 are very popular is how delicious and fresh it is.
For example
,
to
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apply
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imagine that
in
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during
the
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a
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 very hot or
exhausted
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exhausting
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 day, if you drink
a sugar-based
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sugar-based drinks
a sugar-based drink
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drinks
,
such
 as
softdrinks
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soft drinks
, it will make you happier and feel very good.
the
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another reason is
a
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the
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 variety of choices, because of
demand
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the demand
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in
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for
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 these products, the manufacturer
have
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has
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 to always launch new interesting products that can gain more market share. The by-products of
this
 cause are
people
 have more options
of
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for
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 sweet
drinks
 and more convenient
to
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apply
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access to
this
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these
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 junk
drinks
.
In
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At
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 the same time, competition
of gaining
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to gain
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 market share creates
the
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a
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 competitive price.
Thus
, not only it is more easier to purchase it but
also
 more lower prices. As a
results
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result
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, sweet
drinks
 can bring many severe health issues to
people
 who are
addict
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addicted
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them
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to them
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, especially, diabetes and overweight
problems
.
For example
, 1 in 3 of Thailand's population
are
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have
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 diabetes, and 1 in 4 are overweight. The solution from my point of view is the government should take a
sinigficant
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significant
 role
to solve
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in solving
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this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
by
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apply
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policies,
due to
this
 is a kind of
behavior
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behaviour
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problems
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problem
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 and
sweetness
 can bring happiness to
people
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people's
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 life
and
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apply
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drinking
sweet-
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sweet drinks
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drinks
 are
moew
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more
 affordable because of war price in the business, we cannot force
people
 to stop sweer-
drinks
. So, forcing
by
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apply
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policies is a better way.
For instance
, increasing
of
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apply
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sweetness
 tax, production control and standard of sugar-based
drinks
.
To sum up
, even sugar-based
drinks
are give
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give
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people's
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people
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 happiness
by
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through
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its
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their
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 deliciousness and freshness,
on the other hand
,
it
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they
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 cause many health
problems
, not only diabetes but
also
 overweight and more.
Consquently
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Consequently
, the solution in my aspects is the government should
come
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come to
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 take part
by
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in
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sweetness
 control regulations or
sweetness
 tax to
get
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make
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 sweet
drinks
 less affordable.
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