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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask other questions about the trip

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Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing to you in connection with the foreign
trip
 for which you are searching for parents who can go with the children and staff.
First,
let me explain the reasons why I am interested in joining the travel group. Actually, I have been working as a tourist guide for more than ten years in one of the well-known travel agencies and currently, I am on my vacation for fifteen days, but I do not have any plans for my holidays.
Therefore
, when I heard about the news that you are searching for guardians who can join as volunteers, I decided to go with the tour and provide my expert knowledge. I can certainly help in a number of ways to all the group members. First and foremost, I have in-depth knowledge about various popular places including historical and modern ones in Australia.
In addition
 to
this
, I have several contacts with five-star hotels since I have dealt with them multiple times for my clients, so they can provide affordable services to us by offering discounts.
Last
 but not least, I can provide numerous related information about the known places during our journey, which can help all the members to understand the culture, lifestyle, and traditions of Australian people efficiently.
However
, I do not have proper data about the number of individuals including teachers and students who are going on the
trip
. It would be absolutely helpful for me to prepare well if you could provide full details about the
trip
 including the number of people, the budget for the
trip
, and the preferences of the places to visit. It would be great if you could
also
 let me know about the fees which I need to pay to join the tour. I look forward to your positive response with all the answers to my questions. Yours sincerely, Sohelkhan
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task response
The response addresses the task prompt with adequate content, but could benefit from a more direct focus on parental involvement and assistance during the trip.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, but the letter can benefit from improved paragraph structuring and better overall coherence between ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic
  • valuable experience
  • expertise
  • educational objectives
  • supervision
  • ensure safety
  • bonding
  • workshops
  • logistics
  • coordinates
  • travel arrangements
  • clear communication
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • manage schedules
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