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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph provides information about the medium
temperature
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 in Paris,
Dubai
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, and
Sydney
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 from January to December.
Overall
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, the most frequent heat waves were observed in
Dubai
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,
while
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 the lowest
temperature
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 was seen in Paris during 12 months.
To begin
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, in January, the average
temperature
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 was around 25
Celcius
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 in
Sydney
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 which was 5 times higher than in
France
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.
This
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 figure was about 20
Celcius
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 in
Dubai
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. The noticeable changes were observed in May, the average heat was over 30 Celsius in
Dubai
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, and in
France
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, it was threefold higher than in January. As opposed to, the medium
temperature
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dropped
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 to approximately 15
Celcius
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 in
Sydney
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. The second main alteration appeared in July, the average heat rate was roughly 35, 20, and 15
Celcius
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 in
Dubai
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,
France
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, and
Sydney
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, respectively.
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, the opposite trend started in
Sydney
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 and
Dubai
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 in September, the medium warmth of
Sydney
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 was 15
Celcius
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 which was equal to
France
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. The decrease started in September and continued to the end of
this
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 period and stood at around 20
Celcius
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 in
Dubai
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 which was slightly lower in comparison with
Sydney
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. Despite the fluctuation, the average
temperature
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 of Paris fell to the same level as in the beginning ( 5
Celcius
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, dubai, sydney, celcius, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • seasonal trends
  • geographical location
  • climate variation
  • urbanization
  • temperature range
  • comparison
  • data representation
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