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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph provides information about the medium
temperature
 in Paris,
Dubai
, and
Sydney
 from January to December.
Overall
, the most frequent heat waves were observed in
Dubai
,
while
 the lowest
temperature
 was seen in Paris during 12 months.
To begin
, in January, the average
temperature
 was around 25
Celcius
 in
Sydney
 which was 5 times higher than in
France
.
This
 figure was about 20
Celcius
 in
Dubai
. The noticeable changes were observed in May, the average heat was over 30 Celsius in
Dubai
, and in
France
, it was threefold higher than in January. As opposed to, the medium
temperature
dropped
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 to approximately 15
Celcius
 in
Sydney
. The second main alteration appeared in July, the average heat rate was roughly 35, 20, and 15
Celcius
 in
Dubai
,
France
, and
Sydney
, respectively.
However
, the opposite trend started in
Sydney
 and
Dubai
 in September, the medium warmth of
Sydney
 was 15
Celcius
 which was equal to
France
. The decrease started in September and continued to the end of
this
 period and stood at around 20
Celcius
 in
Dubai
 which was slightly lower in comparison with
Sydney
. Despite the fluctuation, the average
temperature
 of Paris fell to the same level as in the beginning ( 5
Celcius
).
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