The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.

The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.
The illustration demonstrates the different
stages
of consumer goods manufacturing and the
process
of information
feedback
. At first
glance
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it is clear that
the
overall
process
contains more than ten
stages
. The linear diagram is shown by
flow
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the flow
a flow
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of information
feedback
and
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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process
. The first
stage
of
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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process
began
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when raw materials and manufactured components are sorted out
to
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the
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storage.
Then
it goes through production planning
along with
the design which was made by product research. At the third
stage
assembly and inspection occurs. If the testing is positive the
process
continues by packaging equipment. In the
last
stages
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it despatches and goes to the sales. The
process
of information
feedback
involves
less
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stages
than the other one.
First
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feedback
happens at the second
stage
of manufacturing, production planning, where it sends
feedback
to storage.
Then
at the
stage
of sales, testing, and market
research
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research,
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the
process
repeat
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again.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stages, process, feedback, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer goods manufacturing
  • stages
  • diagram
  • information feedback
  • adjustment
  • raw material extraction
  • processing
  • component manufacturing
  • assembly
  • packaging
  • overview
  • feedback loop
  • summarize
  • main points
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