The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.
The illustration demonstrates the different
stages
of consumer goods manufacturing and the process
of information feedback
.
At first glance
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glance,
it is clear that
the overall
process
contains more than ten stages
. The linear diagram is shown by flow
of information Add an article
the flow
a flow
feedback
and manufacturing
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the manufacturing
process
.
The first stage
of manufacturing
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the manufacturing
process
began
when raw materials and manufactured components are sorted out Wrong verb form
begins
to
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for
the
storage. Correct article usage
apply
Then
it goes through production planning along with
the design which was made by product research. At the third stage
assembly and inspection occurs. If the testing is positive the process
continues by packaging equipment. In the last
stages
it despatches and goes to the sales.
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stages,
process
of information feedback
involves less
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fewer
stages
than the other one. First
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The first
feedback
happens at the second stage
of manufacturing, production planning, where it sends feedback
to storage. Then
at the stage
of sales, testing, and market research
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research,
process
repeat
again.Change the verb form
repeats
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