Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trenda and fashions than what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, new generations are more addicted to social media trends rather than having their own identity, where we can find young ones

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the herd

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choosing their hobbies

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of selecting an activity that they are really interested in. In my opinion, I believe that one should have

their

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prefered

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preferred

hobbies that could live

along with

them and won't fade

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time. One of the most famous reasons, that people would be enrolled into a sport or adopt a specific hobby is to get to meet new people or build new friendships,

while

feeling as part of the group not being left behind.

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, some would join a class or show interest in something just to have new friends.

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Unfortunately

, these activities sometimes are famous because of trends or social media and will fade away

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time. Eventually, Ones will lose their identity and will be involved in

activity

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that they don't like just to fit in. On the other side, we should encourage our children from

young

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ages

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to know their interests and support them to evolve

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Thus

, they can grow into something that they really like and enjoy and have partners that

are actually have

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common hobbies rather than fake ones.

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, when they get to develop a skill from the early

beginings

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beginning

, they can have it as

career

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the long term and get to work in something that they really enjoy. In conclusion, we shouldn't be dragged into social media trends ,

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we should emphasize our own talents and improve

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, I strongly recommend that for

pre-school

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age we

enroll

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our infants

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activties

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activities

that

matches

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their interests.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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276 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Reflection of trends
Personal preferences
Social media influencers
Technological advancements
Generational shifts
Marketing and advertising
Traditional vs. modern hobbies
Societal expectations
Economic factors
Psychological need
Belonging and acceptance
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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trenda and fashions than what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many countries raise fuel prices to deal successfully with problems of traffic and polluon. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution ?

Some companies use a lot of packaging when selling their products. Why is this? Is it a good thing?