10.The line graphs show the size of the ozone hole in Antarctic and three types of damaging gases that damage the Antarctic ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

10.The line graphs show the size of the ozone hole in Antarctic and three types of damaging gases that damage the Antarctic ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line charts below display the
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square kilometres of the ozone
hole
and the gases that harm it between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, there is a significant increase in the ozone
hole
size over the entire time
period
. Freon fell dramatically,
while
NO2 grew steadily. At the beginning of the
period
, the size of the ozone
hole
was just below 50
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square kilometres,
in
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the next five
years
rose moderately to around 80. From 1985 to 1990 it climbed
shaply
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sharply
to a little under 200, in the
last
10
years
the
hole
continued to climb slightly, ending the
period
at approximately 240. In 1980 Freon was the most produced gas, with nearly 150
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metric tonnes, in the next five
years
it rocketed considerably to 200. From 1985 to 2000, it decreased rapidly to just over 20, becoming the least produced one.
Furthermore
, NO2, at the start of the
period
, had little under 100
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metric tonnes
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of productions
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productions
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production
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,
this
grew modestly until 1985, with 120, and in the
last
5 five
years
it rose steeply to more or less 160.
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