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10.The line graphs show the size of the ozone hole in Antarctic and three types of damaging gases that damage the Antarctic ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

10.The line graphs show the size of the ozone hole in Antarctic and three types of damaging gases that damage the Antarctic ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line charts below display the
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thousands
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thousands of
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 square kilometres of the ozone
hole
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 and the gases that harm it between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, there is a significant increase in the ozone
hole
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 size over the entire time
period
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. Freon fell dramatically,
while
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 NO2 grew steadily. At the beginning of the
period
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, the size of the ozone
hole
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 was just below 50
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thousands
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thousand
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 square kilometres,
in
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and in
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 the next five
years
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 rose moderately to around 80. From 1985 to 1990 it climbed
shaply
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sharply
 to a little under 200, in the
last
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 10
years
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 the
hole
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 continued to climb slightly, ending the
period
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 at approximately 240. In 1980 Freon was the most produced gas, with nearly 150
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thousands
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thousand
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 metric tonnes, in the next five
years
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 it rocketed considerably to 200. From 1985 to 2000, it decreased rapidly to just over 20, becoming the least produced one.
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, NO2, at the start of the
period
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, had little under 100
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thousands
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thousand
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 metric tonnes
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of productions
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productions
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production
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,
this
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 grew modestly until 1985, with 120, and in the
last
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 5 five
years
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 it rose steeply to more or less 160.

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